1. "Sexual Violence Against Men and Boys" written by Wynne Russell, proves how women are not the only victims of sexual violence. The author uses many credible sources and statistics to prove that men are also in danger of sexual violence.
2. "Sexual Violence Against Men and Boys" written by Wynne Russell, was written to inform the audience that women are not the only victims of sexual violence. The author uses many credible sources and statistics to prove that women being the only victims of sexual violence is just a misconception.
3. "Sexual Violence Against Men and Boys" written by Wynne Russell, proves how men are under represented when it comes to sexual violence. The author uses many credible sources and statistics to show that women being the only victims of sexual violence is just a misconception.
Writing my thesis statement was harder than I thought it would be. It is hard to come up with the "perfect" thesis statement. I believe that my thesis statement will improve once I keep editing/rewriting my thesis statement. It would also be helpful to hear other people's opinions because it would truly help me write a really strong thesis statement.
I am in the same boat as you. Writing these statements are surprisingly hard. I referenced your examples and tried to make mine with the same quality that you did.
ReplyDeleteI personally liked the second one the best. It was the worded the best in my opinion and was detailed enough for me to understand what was going to occur in your paper.
ReplyDeleteI vote for the third thesis based on the fact that I can see where you place yourself in the argument and is not wordy.
ReplyDeleteYour thesis will develop greatly once you integrate it with your essay. I found that it will be necessary if you want a smooth transition into the paragraph.
I would use the second one
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